Lonely Sea's Cinematic

[Dark_Paladin]

Hey everyone ever wondered what it would be like to go after a bounty and get stuck on an Isle,for a few weeks then get of the Isle and hunt down the bounty again well if you do check this out http://www.wc3sear.ch/index.php?p=Maps&ID=2339&sid=ba87f1a5c6ac2a058b889e41fabf4071 .And feedback is welcome

 

[Dark_Paladin]

The second part is ready to be downloaded so have fun here's the add once again give feedback http://www.wc3sear.ch/index.php?p=Maps&ID=2344&sid=f273b9d89cd6e33bf73ffcbe6d87edd4

 

[imported_Dragoon]

An excellent map if I do say so myself. the creator is obviously talented.

 

[Dark_Paladin]

Thanks,for the comment,btw The 3de part is comeing along greatly and might be available in a few days! :roll:

 

[Jase_Morden]

This is a pretty cool cinematic with a great storyline so far. Only real problems I could see was with the grammar, other than that, it was cool.

 

[Angelusz]

well, i'm sorry, but i'm not really positive about it.
(maybe i'm just spoiled by other great cinematics i've seen..)

Some tips:
- music fadein/fadeout when the battle starts.
- Grammar
- reduce the obviousness in the monologs and dialogs, the text sometimes made me feel like i was watching a pre-school comicserie of some kind.
(with that i meant the parts like 'first i will have to take off my armor, and lay down my sword')
- Try to use a space, or enter after a sentence is ended. also watch the use of questionmarks, some sentences missed some.

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@ part 2:

- Who is the warden, where did she come from, why did she attack thranduil?
- Omg at the rowboat, that looks terrible, i'd advice you to change that.

 

[Dark_Paladin]

Thank you for your honesty,I will try and make my other Lonely sea's cinematics better.I do relize I've made some huge mistakes but do take this in account,I did do both of these cinematics in less then 4 hours.

 

[Angelusz]

well, then you can be blamed for nothing but not taking enough time to refine things.
For that amount of time, they're really not bad.
Try and spend some more time then, i'm sure you can do alot better

 

[Dark_Paladin]

Well here's part 3 enjoy I've made some inprovements the time of this cine is 6 mins and 7 seconds http://www.wc3sear.ch/index.php?p=Maps&ID=2395&sid=08f1d2aef79ad41a4f517a57d4966683

 

[Dark_Paladin]

Come on people don't be shy you can give feedback,and help a map maker become better