I watched it and thought it was good. But there are some things that you can improve. While It did not disturb me, there was a few spelling-mistakes I could see.(I'm not very good at English myself, and while it did not disturb me, It can't be bad to try to correct it)
Early in the cinematic, Lawrence was moving with his left body through a stone. Later in the cinematic, when you zoomed in at Ysera, it looked quite weird since you got half your vision under the ground, and some of the pillars nearby was floating abit over ground.
These are the things I thought of that can be improved. But what I think is most important in a cinematic is what you did well.
Positive:
1. The story was fast-moving and entertaining.
2. It was a very good use of the camera, the special-effects were nice(especially the portal).
3. The terrain was very well-made.
4. The music was funny, especially when he entered the first portal.
I will rate this 3/5, since it is a well-made cinematic. I can tell that you are skilled at making cinematics and that you put effort into this one. If it was not for the small issues I mentioned, I would give this cinematic a 4/5.