The Secret Curse I

[Moderator]

23:30, 21st Jan 2011
-Kobas-:
Map Status: Rejected
Broken Rules:
(Map) Presentation
Comment

 

[-Kobas-]

Well cinematic is very short so you can't make description for it, you will explain all
Terrain need a little improvement (you know make some smaller trees, import some doodads and so on)

Camera moves through trees, grrr that is bad, move it above or around them!

Maybe some different models instead of footman! But we don't know whole story so that can be ok

Gj on first cinematic, my mark in old days 2/5!

 

[light bolt30]

Can you tell us what this cinematic is about?

 

[Darkzealot_128]

Gonna check this map. Improve description.

Edit: Mediocre terrain, trees don't dissapear properly (if you don't know what I mean watch it), and the story is a little like http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/maps-564/haunted-stone-81938/?prev=of=rating&t=45&r=20&page=10. All that happens in this is the footmen leave the campsite and die.

 

[Marcin013]

Nice work When will be next Part

 

[Darksider]

Thank you for this comments . I will mention it in part II. Part II is in production ...

 

[Ironside]

Description >> Improve it (Rules violation [1])

 

[Marcin013]

Made a map Description

 

[Ironside]

He needs to improve the description here on Hive...

 

[Marcin013]

Map Description vote:3

 

[Marcin013]

If you want a description go on http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/miscellaneous-tutorials-456/map-description-templates-171659/

 

[Darksider]

Thank you for the link ... I will check it

 

[Ironside]

If you want a super description go on http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/miscellaneous-tutorials-456/map-description-templates-171659/

Don't double post please, use the edit button

 

[Darksider]

This is just a test!

 

[Darksider]

Here my newest map: http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/maps-564/red-snow-1-00-a-180482/

 

[Ramza]

Description >> Improve it (Rules violation [1])

Don't double post please, use the edit button

Don't act like a mod please. Leave that to the actual mods.

 

[-Kobas-]

Don't act like a mod please. Leave that to the actual mods.

Well some users gained some powers (example: vote count as 2, can mark reviews and so on) to help moderators!

Guy in your

tags is one of them, he is doing his job, after all rules are on his side...

 

[Ramza]

Ah... half user, half mod.

 

[Ironside]

Ah... half user, half mod.

Yeah..

OP: You going to fix the description or can I contact the moderator now?

 

[Ramza]

Alright, so I checked out the cinematic.

The terrain needs to be improved a lot. Use more doodad variation, like shrub, mushrooms, more rocks, etc (and fog, custom music, weather effects for a better atmosphere).
Cameras need some work. Like Kobas said, make sure you don't let the camera go through any doodads, but around them.
Another problem is disappearing destructables, which happens when you give them a big scaling value, and get too close with your camera.
Grammar needs some work as well.

For a first cinematic it's alright though. I give it a 3/5.
Keep practicing.

 

[Ironside]

After he fixes the description, that is

 

[-Kobas-]

Moderation

The Secret Curse I
Created by Darksider ; Uploaded by: Darksider

Review

Grrr you was warned about map description!
Also I suggested few things to improve as well!
Because there is no any kind of story, camera work is bad, and few other for now less important things I can reject your map.

Map status: Rejected

Broken Rules:
(Map) Presentation
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Status: Rejected