Dear Beloved (Original)

[JetFangInferno]

Someone important left my recently so I wrote a song as a (small) token of remembrance. I would really like to expand the idea but I'm not very good at coming up with extended, consistent entities of music. Let me know your comments and suggestions

Details:
- Recorded on a Yamaha YPG-535 keyboard, connected via usb to Garageband.
- Using the Steinway Piano instrument from Jam Pack 4.


http://www.mediafire.com/?isd9u55822x3b0t

 

[Waldbaer]

A nice piano piece, I think. Nice melody and interesting pop-piano-style harmonics. You're right, this really could use extension. Maybe at 0:38, you could start a middle part, maybe a little more moved there or you find a part of the theme melody you can play around with a little (maybe even both). In the end, you can again add the whole thing you have until now as a reprise and coda. This could really give a nice and round piece, I think, you should really try to extend this.