BTNZombieVomit4

[Moderator]

17:22, 25th Jan 2016
Apheraz Lucent: As I've commented already, it needs a bit more work to be approved. The background is a bit too distracting, and you might achieve a better effect by zooming out a bit.

 

[WhiteFang]

The vomit and the way it's leaving his mouth looks very strange and unnatural

 

[DEE-BOO]

I know :| But I don't know how to fix it.

 

[WhiteFang]

Maybe give it a more 'flowing form' and angle it more downwards.Right now it looks like it's going in a straight line

 

[Razosh]

Maybe give it a more 'flowing form' and angle it more downwards.Right now it looks like it's going in a straight line

Actually had I not seen the title I would have thought he was eating tall grass, it doesn't really look too much like liquid either as you've deawn all the details in straight lines. I know it probably sounds like I think it's bad, I actually think it looks really good I just think the appearance is miss-selling it a bit.

 

[DEE-BOO]

Is this better?

Show

 

[Deleted member 238226]

the zombie is not quite visible imo. the first time i saw this, i don't really know what is this until i saw the title and the big pic. maybe zoom in into the zombie head a little bit?

 

[DEE-BOO]

That's an issue I had when choosing where I should cookie cut it. If I position it so it's head dominant, then it looks like a abomination specific spell, but if I show mostly vomit, it becomes a generic vomit spell for everyone. :/

 

[Panda]

Add more chunks in the vomit and maybe an enemys remains or an eye, something to make it seem disgusting, at the moment its very confusing.

 

[DEE-BOO]

The complex art of vomit.
I'll try to improve it soon.

 

[Roland]

I love it man! Keep up the great work!

 

[DEE-BOO]

Thanks Roland

 

[Apheraz Lucent]

Did you try to zoom out a little? I got a feeling it'd be much better when we could see at least part of the abomination.

Also, green background is a bit distracting. Either tone it down, or darken it a bit