Uhh, I watched the cinematic and I can say that it's very, very weak.
Not only did you just try to copy one of the pissed sounds of the pitlord, you also failed at that.
Let's compare:
Your quotes:
1) "He's a joke! Throw him out!"
2) "Now why don't you tell us why you're really here."
3) "I thought you said you worker for the post office?"
4) "Well, Kimcake, I love you, but, there's something I have something to tell you..."
Actual quotes:
1) "He's a bum! Throw him out!"
2) "Mal, why don't you tell us why you're really here?"
3) "I thought you said you work for the post office?"
4) "Well, Kim-cake, I love you but I have something to tell you…"
You also missed the quote "Oh boy, he pulled the wool over your eyes!" (before "Actually... more of a Pitlord"