'Fate of the Splinters Damn Every, day, is cursed now! Riots on the streets above, Dead soldiers literally liter the streets. Such a horrific sight.

A sad ending for a good man....

Truly, quite well written, SW2.. There's something quite poetically sad about this story.

Indeed, though I don't like how you suddenly make it look like the Alliance of Lagosh were evil. Also the Outland sky doesn't match :/

The story is awesome... like hundreth times better than your old Lagosian times stories and like twice better than current mine. Except for Dave and Josh story, of course.
Of course, you terraining needs some more immproving, I mean now your terrains are nice, but... they need some more... neatness.
I meanin some parts it looks a bit messy or made in a hurry. Like there are those glowing rocks on right, but it would be better if they would be on other side too. Also some of rocks hower. You know, you could use some page up/down plus Ctrl trick up here.

Thank You it took me a while to write it.
Yes I will work on the terrain it was kinda rushed.
And they sky I used the wrong one by accident. >.>

Agree with Tleno, your terrains need some neatness, maybe order. But overall you are getting much better, especially the decriptions.

True, currently these are one of best descriptions in DP.
And well you did a pretty great progress with terraining, the current problems you have to fix with terraining are easy to solve.

Yep. I will solve that. ^.^