[Plot] Basic Premise

[Doomlord]

A long, long time ago in a galaxy, like, really far away...

CLASH FOR THE SACRED CHEESE

It is a period of turmoil in the Zeta Sector. Morgox the Unborn has conquered all of civilization and spread his dictatorship to every corner of the galaxy, ruling with an iron tentacle. But on Delos IV, a rebellion is forming. Ordinary people are rising up to stand against tyranny. Meeting by cover of night, they plot to cripple Morgox's fleet from within. The attack is set in motion simultaneously by confederates working in stardocks across the sector...

Meanwhile, in a completely different galaxy thousands of light years away, on the world of Htoreza, the Righteous Empire of Divinity (RED) and the Black Legion of Undead (BLU), devastated by their own magnificent stupidity during the Great War and left with only a skeleton summoning staff and spawning structures that magically create brainless minions^{[citation needed]}, decide to pull the oldest trick in the book: seeking out an omnipotent artefact of ages past that can turn the tides and end the war once and for all...

Unbeknownst to them, but knownst to us, the ancient gods play practical pranks the hardcore way...
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By the way, his tentacles are literally iron. That isn't some kind of metaphor.

Suggestions and feedback are welcome.

 

[Almia]

And yeah, it was really far away. Immeasurable with your ruler.

Suggesting: Team names.
Sentinel = Yummy Cheese(give one)
Scourge = Smelly Cheese(give also)

I suggest the Scourge name as Veux Bologne,smelliest of em all.

 

[Doomlord]

I prefer serious, epic faction names as they will be contradicting the silly premise.

 

[DivineLight]

is this the Plot?
i more thinking this:

CLASH FOR THE SACRED CHEESE
prologue:
Long-long time ago there is the beginning when people start to know Cheese..
There is story which only some people know.

the continuation story will coming soon.. i'm busy, at least the prologue is here

 

[Doomlord]

I decided on the plot already. We will only modify, not replace.

 

[DivineLight]

oh i see

 

[JollyD]

1. team name - "Get more action, baby"
2. team name - "It is a good day to die"

 

[Doomlord]

That is too long I think

 

[DivineLight]

I prefer serious, epic faction names as they will be contradicting the silly premise.

1. team name - "scramble Team"
2. team name - "greedy Team"
what do you think?

 

[Doomlord]

The Holy Crusaders & The Doom Legion?

 

[Da Fist]

Lactose Intolerant VS Cheese Warriors

Someone mentioned this ( not exactly like this ^ ) though I don't remember where...

 

[Doomlord]

That is Almia. Yeh anyway I decided the team name on my own. Thanks for all suggestions.

 

[DivineLight]

yes, using your own name

 

[Binsu]

Divine Knights & Council of the Dead?

BTW, that is quite a good name if you ask me Doomlord.

 

[morbent]

Crusaders seems amazing with some cool red crosses. and epic scenes. and holy shit
and angels and demons (there are a lot of cool demon models here, angels won't appear so often).

it will be cool

 

[Doomlord]

Got the names now in the main post

 

[Occult Glider]

Doomlord is spy.

^ My thoughts after reading the RED n BLU references.

 

[Doomlord]

Ehehe X)

 

[DivineLight]

Divine Knights & Council of the Dead?

hey, that's my name! xD

 

[Faith]

Team 1, Team 2. c;

 

[Doomlord]

Intro has been rewritten with Pourquoi's suggestions!

 

[DivineLight]

the Righteous Empire of Divinity (RED) and the Black Legion of Undead (BLU)
Nice Name

 

[Almia]

@Da Fist
I mentioned that team.

 

[Doomlord]

Is the current intro adequate? Anything else that needs changing? I am going to use it in the MD thread

 

[Pourquoi]

It is a period of turmoil in the Zeta Sector. Morgox the Unborn has conquered all of civilisation and spread his dictatorship to every corner of the galaxy, ruling with an iron tentacle. But on Delos IV, a rebellion is forming. Ordinary people are rising up to stand against tyranny. Meeting by cover of night, they plot to cripple Morgox's fleet from within. The attack is set in motion simultaneously by confederates working in stardocks across the sector...

Meanwhile, in a completely different galaxy, thousands of light years away, the Righteous Empire of Divinity (RED) and the Black Legion of Undead (BLU), devastated by their own magnificent stupidity during the Great War and left with only a skeleton summoning staff and spawning structures that magically create brainless minions^{[citation needed]}, decide to pull the oldest trick in the book: seeking out an omnipotent artefact of ages past that can turn the tides and end the war once and for all...

Unbeknownst to them, but knownst to us, the ancient gods play practical pranks the hardcore way...

By the way, his tentacles are literally iron. That isn't some kind of metaphor.

Fixed several things and moved the 'citation needed' tag to the middle of the sentence. The 'decided to pull...' thing doesn't need to be 'cited'.

 

[Doomlord]

Okay thanks. Sent you a VM btw