Heartbroken - poem

[mjllonir]

A pounding sound, every second,
The sound of your heart, I reckon,
Slowly, but surely, it slows down,
And finally you frown, and fall down.

The first time I saw your face,
I loved you, but sadly, wasn't the case,
For you, you were, in the arms of another,
But this did not matter.

A few years later, I won your heart,
With a poem, so badly written,
And sadly, tonight I part,
And to you, all my love is given.

A pounding sound, every minute,
Tonight, I leave, like a dove,
To a place, where life is infinite,
At the side of my heartbroken love.

28/04/2009
Mjllonir

 

[X-OMG-X]

A pouding sound, every minute,

pounding*

Anyways i like it
Keep up writing, they are pretty good.

 

[mjllonir]

Trust me I won't stop writing, Its my passion. Anyways, these poems are pretty old, I should submit one of my newer ones

 

[Jsprat100]

This is a cracking poem. Ive tried writing positive ones about love but they always turn to heartbreak. I will just have to give up. I do poem vanitas and I am stuck with it. Its a curse. Lucky I am also sadist.

Anyway, very good, cheery, happy and what forth

 

[mjllonir]

You took this happily? Hmm, well I wasn't happy at all

 

[Jsprat100]

I am never happy - what is there to be happy about? Love is truely an oasis in a desert of hate, but when one loses it, what can one do but wander alone?

 

[mjllonir]

Live, explore! One does not need a companion to be happy, youjust have to look in the right places

 

[naitsirk]

I love the Ryhms You first have AABB then ABAB... The poem is lovely, And it acctully speaks alot of broken love. the Emotions in this poem Are pritty strong.

 

[mjllonir]

If only you really knew me, you would see that all my poems are dread, sadness and death.

 

[naitsirk]

If only you really knew me, you would see that all my poems are dread, sadness and death.

well... The poems about that... IS THE BEST POEMS EVER... They really show Emotions... and Death is like the Theme That I really love

 

[Agrias]

well... The poems about that... IS THE BEST POEMS EVER... They really show Emotions... and Death is like the Theme That I really love

That's kind of depressing but you can't say that poems of death, sadness, and despair are the only way to portray real emotion! The problem is that the sadder poems are all genuine and all the happier poems end up being giant piles of bullshit. :[

It isn't the case for some poems but the happiness in them is over exaggerated and almost surreal to the point where you think the poet or writer is insane or in complete denial of the world.


A great poem mjllonir, I really liked it ; - ;.

 

[naitsirk]

That's kind of depressing but you can't say that poems of death, sadness, and despair are the only way to portray real emotion! The problem is that the sadder poems are all genuine and all the happier poems end up being giant piles of bullshit. :[

It isn't the case for some poems but the happiness in them is over exaggerated and almost surreal to the point where you think the poet or writer is insane or in complete denial of the world.


A great poem mjllonir, I really liked it ; - ;.

well... Your right about that... But, I probelly exaggerated abit with what I said... But I never said it was the Only way to show real way to show emotions I said that they Showed Alot of Emotions, and that's that... There alot of Happiness Poems that show alot of emotion too