It Ends.

[Black Crown]

This is somthing i wrote long ago, when my life was in harder times.

With a smile on your face.
You finally feel in place.
Like nothing more could hold you back.
But befor you know it its all black.

The pavement is cold, Yet you feel so warm.
Your skin is torn, But you feel reborn.
With a smile on your face.
You are no longer a human disgrace.

At your funeral they all cry.
They ask them selfs why you wanted to die.
If only you could tell them you wanted to fly.
One time before you die,

 

[Linaze]

It is beautiful, no doubt. There are a few typos however, the first "finnaly" should be "finally", then there are to "befor's", that should be two "before's". Like I said, it is dramatic and filled with emotions, and drags the reader into understanding the situation the person is in. Good work!

 

[brad.dude03]

Yes, there are many spelling and grammar errors, but the overall concept is quite good. I liked it a lot actually, especially the last few lines.

 

[Black Crown]

Thank you, I wrote this awhile ago.
I fixed the spelling errors Linaze said.

 

[Airandius]

You could make a soing out of it.
It's so sad yet so beautiful, I realy like it.

 

[Black Crown]

Thank you. Thank you all.