The true story of Arthas

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Date: 20:08:46 29-Jul-12
Map Moderator: -Kobas-
Map Status: Rejected 1/5
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Rejection Reasons:
Map has low quality terrain!

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Comment: Story is really bad.

 

[-Kobas-]

Map has poor or no description!

In other words your map description is unacceptable.
http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/general-mapping-tutorials-278/importance-description-127031/
http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/miscellaneous-tutorials-456/map-description-templates-171659/

Map has low quality terrain!

Terrain is really bad. Empty, without cool doodads, maybe some unique terrain techniques etc etc.

Map triggers are bad (Broken, leaks, not optimized)!

Well to make moderator review simple and short I globalized some things.
My tool will generate this msg for triggers if I find leaks, few basic errors or broken/bad scripts etc etc.
In your case we have next problems:

• Unit - Order Arthas 0001 <gen> to Move To (Center of Front of Frostmourne <gen>)

Your trigger action create point leak, or should I say location leak.
This is bad.
http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/triggers-scripts-269/things-leak-35124/
There are few more threads/tutorials that explain this.

• Special Effect - Create a special effect at (Center of Region 009 <gen>) using Abilities\Spells\Human\FlameStrike\FlameStrike1.mdl

You use same trigger actions over and over, you should use FOR function instead

Also creating units, setup variables etc is usually bad, and can ruin cinematic smoothness.

I suggest creating all units you will need, setup variables,

• Time - Elapsed game time is 0.00 seconds

, and then just hide and unhide them while playing.

This way whole script can look organized and well optimized if you clean leaks and make code simple.

 

[Ber352]

Just to remember stoppers-by: The upper message was written before the update, so you can download now and enjoy the cinematic. Remember to post what you thought of it.

 

[Vengeancekael]

Removed Kobas' 1/5 rating.
Re-reviewing this.

 

[Ber352]

So, any idea when the review might be complete? I've been visiting the map everyday ever since the update to see if it got approved. I know you got a lot to do, but still it's a 4:30 long cinematic only. Thanks for the moderator that reads this.

 

[trolman]

ugley

 

[Vengeancekael]

So, any idea when the review might be complete? I've been visiting the map everyday ever since the update to see if it got approved. I know you got a lot to do, but still it's a 4:30 long cinematic only. Thanks for the moderator that reads this.

Sorry, I promise I'll have it reviewed tomorrow

edit:

Memory leaks are not destroyed.
The 'make alliances' trigger is useless, you can just change the alliances under 'Scenario-Player Forces'

Anyways:

First off, the cinematic isn't really funny, rather childish humor and some of the dialogue transmissions wait for too long, a message like 'Ok' should only take a second and then the next scene should already start.
And then, the terrain, the horrifying terrain.
There's barely any tile variation in the palace chamber, random doodads like flowers, a fountain, armor racks, which are completely randomly placed all over the room.
Also you should try to avoid blizzard cliffs and use the height tools.
And the black citadel statue doesn't fit the snow environment.

Overall your idea is too simple, the jokes aren't funny, no real combat scenes, a very lacking terrain, also quite random and the triggering is not leak-free.

Rating: 1/5
Check out the links in my moderation comment.

 

[-Kobas-]

Story is really bad, unacceptable really, it just make no sense at all.
Terrain is still plain, empty.
Camera movement is a little better than last time, that's good. Just try not to make static camera, move it even a little if needed.
Reduce transmission duration, just like Kael said, OK last 3 sec.

Take my advice:
Give up on this map. Create something else you have some knowledge now, check other cinematics get some new ideas.