Although the over-arching action of the story was somewhat generic, I must admit it had some interesting features that you don't tend to see often.
However, it is sadly riddled by quite a few bits of bad grammar that break the flow of the story.
It is also clear that you've got a whole bunch of ideas hidden away inside your psyche, and as with many others your problem is the execution of the storytelling, not the story itself.
Keep that in mind and keep writing.
Horray! Expected the *Bad Grammar* part, since English is not my forte. And the problem of storytelling, told to me plenty of times by my English Teacher that " You always go around the bush! Tell the story straighter! " or something similar. And Greek Mythology? Hell ( or Underworld ), I like that more than getting a chocolate ice cream for breakfast. And My Age Is
, so you'll see me more especially in contests to spread Greek Mythology