Sect of the Holy Mother 2

[Moderator]

Captain Griffen:
Again, fundamentally very good, you've got the tricky creative bit, but the polish is lacking. Quality of English and terraining, mainly. Story is better in this one, too, less clichéd.

 

[DarkIron Dwarf]

200000000000000000005/5

 

[Byaku]

I rate it 5/5

 

[slavi621]

Relly nice video. It has a reat story. But it's kind of brutal... - Good job!

 

[Mage_Goo]

nice cinematic,
nice story,
i like it very much

 

[I34w90_238j]

Use Advanced==>Reset Height Field to automatically randomise the whole map's terrain hills.

 

[CMarket]

Why? This is my early work. Watch the whole series and you will see that the terrain, as well as everything else, gets improved by a great deal.

 

[Code Lyoko]

My review of this cinematic:

Story [+] - Story was again great, and I understood it.

Enviroment [+] - The prison was nice, I like prisons on maps. And the prisoners comments were great too! That cultist's death in the prison was one of my favourites.

Humor [+] - There was again humor, which was again good and sometimes great.

Sounds [+] - There were nice sounds, the nightmare's sounds were great!

Custom models [+] - Way to go, you added 1 custom model in this cinematic, excellent! Way to go the stars!

Terrain/Trees [+/-] - There were no custom trees (at least I didn't see any) and terrain was OK, but because no custom trees, and not much trees at all, neutral point.

Voice acting [+/-] - No voice acting, I hope and wish that you add/have voice acting added on other cinematics than The Lone Panther only.

Overall 5/5 YOU DID IT, but could be better (you know, voice acting, more custom models etc...)

HIGHLY RECOMMEND!!!

 

[Sempiternus]

Hiya.

I liked this cinematic. Shows that you did improve allot sence your first cinematic, all the errors i can think of are that you misspelled some dialogs.

I can allso buy that Nikola learned Bladestorm thanks to his combat experiences.

But dident the Captain die in the begining of the cinematic..?

And what did the Necromancer in the beginning mean by "My death wont matter"..?

+ Rep.

3/5.

~Semp~

Edit: You misspelled Captain to Caprain.

And i dident see the Rays of Moonlight effect in the cinematic.

Edit 2: Will add reputation when site allows me.

 

[CMarket]

"My death won't matter" was the shortened version of what the necromancer said in part 1. I'm not sure if you noticed but the first few short scenes of part 2 are dreams, recalling what happened.

Oh, and I guess it's a bit confusing but the captain that you see in part 2 isn't the same as from part 1. Later you will learn that Nikola is currently in Red Stone, and in part 1 he was in East Bizol.

Da Map

 

[Sempiternus]

Yeah, i dident notice that.

BTW: Do you mind if i use your maps to learn how to make cinematics..?

Edit: Im going to watch part 4 now.

 

[CMarket]

Sure, you can open it in the WE and see how things are done. However, don't modify the map or redistribute it.

The reason I don't protect maps is so that people can learn from them.

 

[Sempiternus]

Ok, thanks.

 

[Zelda.Alex]

After seeing the "Sect of the Holy Mother" i saw this. The things which i noticed:
1.....in this cinematic there are a lot of typing mistakes just like the "Sect of the Holy Mother". i won't point them, too much.
2.....when Nikola was sleeping where was his head? initially it appeared to me that you had changed his hair to yellow. Also he stood up on his bed. didn't he? if it could be done then sitting up would have been a better option.
3.....the paths you have made in the moon valley are totally straight. This makes it look very bad. it looked as they have been just created for the cultists walk to the center where they could assemble. i know that is the exact reason why you made that mountain as i got a little glimpse of the adjoining area but i think that reason should not be appearing after the viewers that easily.
4.....after the cultist leaves then Nikola follows him but he isn't shown. I know that the whole thing was from Nikola's eyes but the viewers of this cinematic will also like to see that.
5.....when Nikola attacked the cultists in moon valley then many of them were still doing their previous acts as if nothing was happening there.
6.....when Nikola attacks the leader from behind then she runs away. Instead of this she should be thrown away by the attack.
7.....how did the guards came to know about the place of meeting anyway? the woman did not have enough time to tell everybody. Did she had?
8.....you made Nikola strongest of the 4 in the initial dream. Didn't you? He killed all the skeletons in one hit only while the others couldn't kill.
9.....terrain needs improvement.
10.....in the initial dream the watch tower wasn't attacking. Did you really want to make that a realistic dream? then you should have made it attack.
11.....regarding the 3 things that held flowers near nikola's table. you had used 3 of them to give appearance of 1 but it clearly showed that there were 3. there ends showed in the middle of the others.
12.....the woman was standing over a chair? standing near it would have been better.
13.....the woman said about the cultists and then said ohhhhhhhh but no blood or anything flowed at this point. Adding some effect of this kind would have been better.
14.....it appears that the cinematic really is made according to the convenience of Nikola. There is only one rock at the place of meeting and that is so near the place of entry that just tells the obvious. It has just been fitted there.
15.....as the cultist walked away did he not see Nikola? By that angle he must be in clear view for him while he was going out from the place of meeting.
16.....cinematic can't be skipped WITHOUT exiting the game

The story continues nicely. It is quite original too. It had much the same problems as in the "Sect of the Holy Mother" and so was its quality and so is my rating too.
My Rating: 2/5. The reason in brief for the rating:
1.....bad scenes at many points
2.....Terrain has to be improved much.
3.....lot of typing mistakes
4.....cinematic can't be skipped WITHOUT exiting the game

 

[Sempiternus]

I wasent able to add rep before. So i did it now.

Anyway. I'll watch the next part when im able to add rep again. Strong of you not to update you'r work, and keeping it as it was accordence to you'r skill in history. Good work.

I will probebly not do the same.

+ Rep

 

[Vosty]

Better than the first. All I have to say.
I almost loled at all the obvious stuff the characters said, but by then I was too bored by long waits.
All I could say is more action. You only used like 1/8 of the maps space.
2.5/5

 

[Golden Dragon]

guys i have problem...when i downloaded the file it didn't apper in the game.....i tried diffrent places but it didn't work

 

[Noypi]

Time for error-checking:
* Typos, typos... I've spotted at least 5 misspelled words and some grammar mistakes.
* Terrain needs fixing especially at the mountain area.
* Cinematics cannot be skipped unless closed.

However, there are some good points:
* Interesting story - makes the viewer gain interest to watch the series.
* Humor - Not too much, but not too few. Great.
* Fight Scenes - its better than the previous one.

Needs more polishing. Proof-read first before submitting your map.
I post my opinion on every cinematic i watch. That would be all.