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Murder Incognito

Submitted by leventopoulo
This bundle is marked as approved. It works and satisfies the submission rules.
Murder Incognito

Plot
Obnoxious detective Dick acquires a case about the murder of a young woman, only to find out that there is a much more sinister scheme surrounding this case....


Duration: 15 minutes
Genre: Crime,Mystery,Thriller
Creator: leventopoulo



Screen-shots:

The First scene:
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Screen-shots:

Detective Dick:
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Like in previous maps I used the AT&T Text to speech engine, with the addition of my voice. Also please tell me what you think of my map in the comments! Thank you.

The Idea Behind the Cinematic:
Starting from 2009 I have been uploading cinematic maps on the hive. Most of my maps had failed to grasp the quality that the hive required, but after a lot of frustration and devotion I finally found the idea of adding voices of Text to Speech engines and decided to incorporate them in my maps. The idea to me was sound, although many do not find the voices emotional enough. To me, having voices is the key ingredient to any cinematic map, I prefer it over silence. In the future I hope to find real voice actors. My previous maps had text to speech but no real scripting was done, everything was though of at the moment, so they lacked the quality that, I believe, this map delivers.

Anyway, this map was though of after writing a script, called "Incognito Killings", to make into a short film with my friends. The short film idea was demolished (other projects were pursued and completed) and I decided to make a map with parts of the script. The final product is a 15 minute cinematic using 1/3 of the script. I started developing the map in December 2011 and finished it by march the next year. I added some final touches to it and uploaded it to the hive shortly after that.

In order for the map to be approved an adventure had to ensue. After a personal disagreement with one of the moderators, he wrongfully rejected the map. But of course this action was unfair and the map was approved some time later by another moderator. I now hold no ill thoughts of that moderator, and I hope he does not hold any grudges on me.

The map was recently updated and a bonus scene was added. I hope viewers will enjoy the final product. A lot of love and attention was given to it. I doubt I will invest more time on creating a whole new map. Once, in 2013, I tried to make a whole new cinematic with extensive dialogue but after working for a month on it, my computer crashed and all data was erased. Alas I was extremely disappointed and stopped for two years. In 2015 I decided to increase the quality of this map, hoping that its legacy will be remember on the hive. I will update it again sometime...


Change Log:

v1.0: The map was uploaded. The original unrated version
v1.1: Toned down the language and corrected annoying typos.
v1.2: Improved Sound quality, small dialogue alterations, added bonus scene.
v1.3: Replaced TTS voice with a human one. Added movement in the interrogation scene.
V1.4: Adapted for Reforged ( Fixed broken camera angles, sky, synced music). Post-Credit scene added (Which I had done years ago but didn't upload that version).



Credits:

MUSIC/SOUNDS:
Thanks to AT&T for their amazing Text To speech demo.
Thanks to LA Noire for the Jazz music theme
And the majestic Ave Maria composers.
Special thanks to FindSounds.com
MODEL MAKERS:

Police car
By skrab

Camera Man
By The Weird Human

phdoodadwall01
By Pyramidhe@d

Male villager variation (Black haired version)
By Dan van Ohllus



Enjoy!

Keywords:
leventopoulo,detective,murder,incognito,spy,crime,thriller,horror,mystery,cool,dick,police
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Vengeancekael [img] Date: 2012/Dec/07 20:13:16 [Please do not send me a message, use Staff Contact] [img] Comment:Kind of a funny cinematic, I like Detective Dick's attitude, but it does become annoying after a while, especially his pauses and...
  1. AnonymousPro

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    there's absolutely nothing wrong with the language, or it would be too boring :D
     
  2. leventopoulo

    leventopoulo

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    Thanks Mate! I appreciate your views!!
     
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    I think you should have a load screen too.
     
  4. San_Melon

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    really nice 5/5
     
  5. StoPCampinGn00b

    StoPCampinGn00b

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    Requested Re-moderation

    I won't be using my review template here since it isn't a full review of the map, but here are the reasons why I'm keeping the moderator comment as a three star rating. No spoilers below!

    1. The grammar and spelling is not proficient. There are lots of apostrophes, periods, spelling and capitalization errors in over half of the sentences. Refer to: https://www.hiveworkshop.com/posts/1450816/. For example, I as its own word should always be capitalized. No sentence should have no ending punctuation. You're trying to express the word foul but you spell it fool. It doesn't have to be excellent English, but at least to the point where it's not extremely noticeable that the quality of the English is bad.

    2. Camera turns are too sharp. There sharp camera turns especially in the beginning of the cinematic. It makes me dizzy, and I'm sure others don't exactly like that.

    3. The voices are sub-par. I wouldn't say they're bad, but they don't express feelings which makes the tone of the story very monotone. It is better than no voices at all.

    4. There aren't any animations or special effects that stand out. Say you are a director. Say, Michael Bay, director of the Transformers franchise. Without the slow-mo, explosions, robotic leaping and other effects the movie has, would the movie goers have the same taste after the movie? To be frank, no, they wouldn't. Without any effects or unique animations, you'd have to hope viewers will enjoy the story. If not, there wouldn't be much a viewer would enjoy.

    5. The terrain is above average, but of course it could definitely look better by adding more doodads that are fitting to the theme of the map. Just make sure not to spam.
     
    Last edited: Feb 11, 2015
  6. Arad MNK

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    Warning: Might contain Spoilers
    Weak cinematic. The camera Working was terrible. The Voice acting was done by a Application, that is bad because it was out of any emotions.
    10 Minutes and a Detective story? Hmmmm...
    The Ending was Wierd. I didn't get it. The Detective was the killer? Then what was the Motivation? The Story needed a Flashback. And If Somebody hit a Police, They don't shoot him, they arrest him and if he was killing someone they shoot him!

    Overall, this cinematic deserves a 3/5.
     
  7. SirGareth

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    Like this cinematic a lot. I think the AT&T voices do a good job, nothing to complain about.
    Its not that usual to make cinematics like this, thats what i loved probably the most. Cool cinematic, nice idea.
    5/5
     
  8. deepstrasz

    deepstrasz

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    3/5. Nothing much to it apart from visuals. It's basically spoiling itself.

    -it's pretty obvious the killer is the detective after scheduling meeting the deceased's friend the next day
    -also, android voices