[Cinematic] Dr.Fried's Ambitions -- Part 1

[Bu113t]

Well this is my first cinematic, but I dont care if is throw all you got at it.

Story
Dr. Fried is a mad scientist with some stranger power. His quest was to discover all the secrets of the body... but someone tries to stop him! When suddenly on day a bounty hunter apear trying to kill him! But he is no for Fried... but the bounty hunter has brought a whole town to fight him!


I hope you can give me some tips on how to make it better!

 

[Critters]

I don't have much to say, but here are a few suggestions:
-make the camera move a bit more often during dialogs
-is there any particular reason for the lilly pads around the tower?
-the fire attachement in the villagers hands could be replaced by torches (well that is if it was your intention to have them bear torches)
-in my honest opinion the music didn't really fit the mood of the cinematic, maybe you should consider changing it and maybe using more than just one
-maybe you should smooth a bit the edge of the "pool of blood"

Well that's all for now, I hope this will help you.

 

[lord_ken]

Critters, Maybe because there was a flood and it got washed there? XP
Pro's
• Love the stalagmites.
• Story is nice
• Terrain was good
Con's
• The Khratar or whatever walked through the archway without breaking it or bumping on it?
• Dr Fried sure runs fast. He reached the blood pool while the Khratar was still going to it.
• Please, Replace the fire with torches on the villagers.
• Rick Dadl, and Dr Fried fly system needs to be improved.

Neutral
• NONE

 

[CMarket]

It was an alright cinematic. You need to improve your terrain, most of it just looks like melee map terrain, except the stalagmites. The camera is just standing in some places for too long, like when that Lich resurrected the villagers. Plus all the villagers just die with no special effect or anything.

And I agree with Lord_ken, how did the Lich go through the archway and does the doctor really run that fast? And yes the Doctor's and rifleman's flight needs to be improved.

The story is ok, it has potential and I didn't see too many grammar errors either.