[COMIC] My Attempt

[DarkDenizen]

Ok, here it is. This is the product of many an otherwise useless study hall. I'm not trying to make the art the strong point in this, which should be apparent from my drawings. Here are the first 8 frames (4 per side of page), which will hopefully be enough to give something of an introduction. Feel free to criticize, but make sure not to turn this thread into a flame war like every other comic thread that has been made here.

 

[WILL THE ALMIGHTY]

Wow.

You win for worst drawings ever.

Don't try to start a comic if you can't even draw.

 

[DaedraEater]

Wow.

You win for worst drawings ever.

Don't try to start a comic if you can't even draw.

Dude, thats a bit harsh, its the plot that matters most, what would happen if you had the best artist ever but knew nothing about making a good story? Exactly, we'd have nothing.

I actually found it was pretty good, could you post some more soon?

 

[Mini-Me]

I liked it. The sixth frame was kinda funny . This is the only real comic thread so far on hive. Congrats.

 

[Cheeder]

I think comic stands for comical.. If you could make it more comicy then i'd laugh!

A forf effort.

 

[WILL THE ALMIGHTY]

Dude, thats a bit harsh, its the plot that matters most, what would happen if you had the best artist ever but knew nothing about making a good story? Exactly, we'd have nothing.

I actually found it was pretty good, could you post some more soon?

Comics still need some sort of a good presentation. It's not a bad story... but the images need to be reworked.

At the very worst, do something like Stunmutt or Cyanide and Happyness. Those are "cheap", but "stylised" looks, and don't require all that much talent.

Heck, you can even use paint to add simple colors in, no need for shading.

 

[donut3.5]

Never read xkcd, have you WILL?
Humor > Art in a comic.
--donut3.5--

 

[DarkDenizen]

Comics still need some sort of a good presentation. It's not a bad story... but the images need to be reworked.

At the very worst, do something like Stunmutt or Cyanide and Happyness. Those are "cheap", but "stylised" looks, and don't require all that much talent.

Heck, you can even use paint to add simple colors in, no need for shading.

If you prefer that I draw nice pictures as apposed to make a funny comic, I can do that. My time is kinda limited at the moment, so I don't choose to spend it all drawing. If you had read the first post, you would have understood that art was not my focus here.

 

[PurplePoot]

Mini, you forgot Dragon Party. That one was made of win.

Anyhow, not bad, but the 6th frame was probasbly the funniest... or was there supposed to be a punchlinee (ie does that continue or not?)

I like the Mr Hero Protagonist thing, too

 

[TheDivineBoss]

Epic phail. >_<

 

[DarkDenizen]

This will continue, my free time depending. And people, PLEASE don't come here looking for fine art. I'm trying to deliver a plot, not eye candy. And, TDB, how is your post useful? I'm looking for critique, not stupidity.

 

[brad.dude03]

DivineBoss is made of epic fail.

I liked it, it was cool to see a classic-style hand drawn comic, and it wasn't too bad

 

[TheDivineBoss]

Could be better though, if this was rateable, I would go for a 6,5/10...


Edit: Ok... Fine, I give a 6,5

 

[DaedraEater]

That low? I'd give it a 8/10 for story and 6/10 for drawing (but what do I know?? lol). so in general I'd give a seven, good overall but needs buffing up to be served to the pros here at the hive.

 

[TheDivineBoss]

Few things you have to keep a eye on while making a comic:

) Good drawnings, not good are these.
) Story not to weird what happend here right.
) Dialog must be better, couldn't understand it after the first picture.
) Maybe jokes or something...

Can I referre a link to a comic of some sort? The details get better when it goes through the story.

 

[DarkDenizen]

Well, thanks for the input, but it seems like everyone else here (except for maybe WILL) disagrees with you.

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

What the hell do you mean this fails? It was very good!

 

[Pyritie]

At least this has an actual story.

A shame the drawings are so bad. Try a scanner next time.

 

[Eleandor]

Well, it's better than the average WoW screen with some boring unfunny text on it... I guess...

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

At least this has an actual story.

A shame the drawings are so bad. Try a scanner next time.

They are scanner, can't you see they are pencil drawn? You can see fold lines on the paper, and a coffee stain

 

[TheDivineBoss]

Yup, that got scanned. I wished I could scan n upload (SnU) something of mine, a random drawning yes, so I could show my artqualities.. But I lost my cable for the scanner...

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

They use the same as the printer don't they?

 

[DarkDenizen]

I'm not trying to make the art the strong point in this, which should be apparent from my drawings.

OMFG... if I hear ONE more person bitch about the drawings... If I wanted to draw nice pictures, I would. In fact, I don't really care about the art, because I'd like to prove that the art does not make the comic.

 

[DaedraEater]

... because I'd like to prove that the art does not make the comic.

Its true!! Look at 'Pearls Before Swine'. Sure it may be stupid and corny, BUT it has crappy art AND is funny (not good story, but anyways... you see my point).

 

[Elenai]

Its all about the delivery...

 

[WILL THE ALMIGHTY]

Whoever says the comic's story is nothing important compared to the art is a moron.

Comics need a decent artistic design. Notice here I'm not saying QUALITY, I'm saying DESIGN.

In a humorous comic, you may not need awesome drawings, but you need something that can work. I'll tell you one thing, ugly five-year old drawings with horribly squiggly lines and bad design DOESN'T WORK.
You need style. Sometimes it can just be a very simple round head with a square body and stick arms, but it's still better than this.

If you're not good at drawing, aim for a simple and cheap design.


As for serious comics... you need kickass art skills, or else your comic will be crap. Story is nothing in such a comic compared to awesome scenes.

 

[HINDYhat]

/agree

xkcd is basically shitty drawings, but they still have design.

 

[Pyritie]

They are scanner, can't you see they are pencil drawn? You can see fold lines on the paper, and a coffee stain

Then you have a horrible scanner.

 

[WILL THE ALMIGHTY]

Have you tried ripping the pages out instead of thowing the whol darwing book in the scanner?

 

[DarkDenizen]

Actually, they are not scanned. They are photographed. I do not have a working scanner at the moment.

 

[brad.dude03]

That would explain a few things then xD

 

[DarkDenizen]

Here's 4 more frames. Right now I'm just trying to keep it from stagnating while I get some free time to really do a lot of work on it (and hopefully take some more time on the art). Enjoy (or don't).

EDIT: sorry about the condition of the page, but my backpack got soaked today. Water damage ftl. Still no scanner.

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

Ftw in my case, my French book got so soaked that it was unusable XD This is the textbook not the writing book btw!

 

[DarkDenizen]

That sucks. $50 out of your pocket, eh?

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

No, they gave me another one free!

 

[DaedraEater]

No, they gave me another one free!

Awesome!! That happened with a script for the school play... but I had to pay $20, .

 

[TheDivineBoss]

And how thick was that script then? 20 pages?

 

[DaedraEater]

Yeah, but dude it was a short play (like a revised version for school or something, i dunno).

 

[WILL THE ALMIGHTY]

Haha, now that the bad drawing is part of the joke, this is a LOT better!

The doodle dimension, hehe.

EDIT: just add a few more jokes.

 

[DarkDenizen]

Yes, in fact. The adventures in the Doodle Dimension will continue until they can escape (i.e. I find some serious drawing time).

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

Just carry on doodling, you're kinda inspiring me to get out the dusty ol' pencil and paper!