Another Day of Colonial War

[PainMoth]

Since I have some time on my hands, I would like to write this little story about a colonial encampment near an unidenified marshland. I would like to refer this time perod more along the ages of the American Civil War.

It is cold, gloomy, night in the desolate marshlands of this dreary coastline. Another day of war; another day of death. Men moan in the aqueous mud, forsaken of their past experience. War took a great toll on these brave men who now lay dazed, abolished of merriment. Their rifles burdened by the encumberment of rust and age. The marshlands carried a damp burden, demoralizing the men of their valor and zeal. Eyes yonder; the men stood taciturn of surrounding activity. Suddenly, the general stoops from his garrison, observing the distinctions of the forest; attempting to map this unknown destination.

"Men!", staunchly arose the general's voice. "We now depart from this dark wilderness. Deport your belongings and relish in battlehardy courage. We shall now withdrawl from these silent terrains and rendevouz with our bretheren at Jamestown." The men loaded their belongings and set march out of the harsh enviroment. With the men now ready and embargo on their conquest, a boy suddenly appears from the distance. The drummer boy be hail, comes playing a mystifying tune. The solders engulf in such power of song and depart with pride.

"Hi ho away we go to twilight's last divine! To now we march away in bold to brother's grevious fight!"

 

[brad.dude03]

It was quite well written, but far too short. If you expanded it, this would be fine indeed.

 

[PainMoth]

I had no intention of expanding. I wanted to broaden the atmosphere of the story in as little writting as possible.

This is simply a day of no battle. I do feel like expanding this thread with another story of the battle.

After I've written that, I'll post it under this post for validification of my update.

 

[I)eadnerzhul]

Very nice. I'm glad someone else besides meself' has some writing skills. Bravo. I posted something similar, and got some reputation from Werewulf for it as well, called the "Hero's Journey". It's kind of like yours. Out of curiousity, what inspired you to write this? I was inspired to write my poem/story/monologue hybrid by listening to a remix of the Legend of Zelda theme I found on Newgrounds, called "Link's Victory Parade". For me, I need to feel inspired to write something. What about you? What is your inspiration, and if you do not have one, what was the purpose of the story to begin with (not to sound offensive, it was incredibly well written. I like it.)?

 

[PainMoth]

My stories are inspired through history. I love American history as well as global history (Such as WW1 and WW2)

I've been currently reviewing the 1850s-1900s to thats why I feel more confident in constructing such stories. Once I review the period of WW1, I predict I'll have the motivation into developing a new story in that time period.

PS:

besides meself'

Did you purposely misspell?

 

[I)eadnerzhul]

Aye, thawt' oi' did, laddie' (Yes, that I did good buddy)! Dwarves are awesome, which is why I roleplay as them almost as much as I play as them in Battle for Middle Earth 2: Rise of the Witch King. Not that I'm not American or don't care about American history, but it's just so plain. I like learning about my own people, however. The history of the rise of the Jews is one of the most interesting ever, particularly because it is out of the ordinary.