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Linaze: Overall of too low quality to be approved. Read some of the comments for some pointers.
Linaze: Overall of too low quality to be approved. Read some of the comments for some pointers.
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the story of kael pt 1
- Author(s)
- tysej4
- Size
- 24.59 KB
- Rating
- Downloads
- 11
- Created
- Aug 6, 2009
- Updated
- Aug 6, 2009
- Resources
- 1
- State
Approved
This bundle is marked as useful / simple. Simplicity is bliss, low effort and/or may contain minor bugs.
here we follow the young blood mage kael as he leads hes people into the world of sighs and lols
i would like to thank archian for his nice tutorial
can be edited without giving me credit simply beacuse i never expect it to good
Keywords:
blood elves. high elves
i would like to thank archian for his nice tutorial
can be edited without giving me credit simply beacuse i never expect it to good
Keywords:
blood elves. high elves
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Reviews
- Joined
- Jul 24, 2009
- Messages
- 1,842
Awful in every look. Without further thinking i give it 0/5 and vote for Rejection.
- Joined
- Dec 13, 2008
- Messages
- 1,047
Agreed. but give the guy some pointers, dont just say rejection w/o any pointers to how to make it better. If it is going to be a story of Kael, a lore character, you should make the cinematic look epic. And that starts with several things you need to fix:
~Grammer: There are a lot of grammar errors that need to be ratified. There were run-on sentences and many words were just plain spelled wrong. Noobish writing.
~Positions: The worker ordered everyone to start moving, that bothered me....a worker should not command everyone to start working. Also, Kael should be more involved. All he said was...."Damn, whats wrong now?" and "Hurry up" (if I remember correctly) Involve the players more.
~Length: Make the cinematic longer....it was very short, very boring, not engaging at all.
Tips: Watch the frozen throne cinematics. They are very well done and are great models in creating a good cinematic.
Hope that helps
~Over and Out~
~Grammer: There are a lot of grammar errors that need to be ratified. There were run-on sentences and many words were just plain spelled wrong. Noobish writing.
~Positions: The worker ordered everyone to start moving, that bothered me....a worker should not command everyone to start working. Also, Kael should be more involved. All he said was...."Damn, whats wrong now?" and "Hurry up" (if I remember correctly) Involve the players more.
~Length: Make the cinematic longer....it was very short, very boring, not engaging at all.
Tips: Watch the frozen throne cinematics. They are very well done and are great models in creating a good cinematic.
Hope that helps
~Over and Out~
- Joined
- Nov 28, 2008
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- 704
Bad grammar and cinematics do not mix.
0/5
0/5
- Joined
- Jan 15, 2009
- Messages
- 35
yes i know i should make it better but hey no bugs hahahhahahah and it wasent to tell his story it was just for fun but i keep making maps and hope that i someday actuly make something that gets aproved sorry for mispelling i come from denmark not usa or england im not speaking english or writing english all day
- Joined
- Dec 13, 2008
- Messages
- 1,047
Mmmm, I see. Well, see if you can get someone to partner making cinematics with you who, after you write something, can fix your grammer errors. Because there are a lot!
