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MW Episode # 1
- Author(s)
- Dmazzz
- Tags
- Cinematic, Medieval / Warcraft
- Size
- 1310.33 KB
- Rating
- Downloads
- 209
- Created
- Aug 9, 2009
- Updated
- Jul 31, 2010
- Resources
- 1
- State
Approved
This bundle is marked as useful / simple. Simplicity is bliss, low effort and/or may contain minor bugs.
The Story of a Father, Son and his uncle in which both adults are retired Elite soldiers who live isolated on their own farm and have forgotten about their former life as elite soldiers are forced to defend their kingdom During the Great Orc War.
(This is a Cinematic Series)
(Episode 1)
-----------The Team----------
Dmazzz (Project Leader)
Slaydon(Ideas + Triggering)
Keywords:
Medieval, War, Cinematic, Peasants
(This is a Cinematic Series)
(Episode 1)
-----------The Team----------
Dmazzz (Project Leader)
Slaydon(Ideas + Triggering)
Keywords:
Medieval, War, Cinematic, Peasants
Contents
Reviews
- Joined
- Jun 13, 2009
- Messages
- 450
Please tell me if there is something i must change or anyway i can make it better?
All the Credits are in the Trigger Area.
All the Credits are in the Trigger Area.
- Joined
- Apr 7, 2008
- Messages
- 1,618
watched it, and here some tips or improvements.
1) normal warcraft 3 music isn't that good for an cinematic. Try to find a fitting music for your cinematic
2) there were no sounds. Use sounds, to create a nice atmosphere.
3) camera was poorly done. Also were the camera angles. Try to find good angles, and don't apply every 20 seconds a new camera, which moves for 5 seconds.
4) terrain was lacking-average. The use of cliffs wasn't very good, especially for the lake.
5) It was quite boring, and there wasn't much suspense.
6) Why did the orc raider said that he will kill them, but then, he teleports away?
7) Reset the animation of the units after you used an animation.
8) and improve the description at hive. Tell more about the orcs, humans, main characters, etc.
9) also camera went through trees, which doesn't look good.
10) If you want to use another transmission kind, then write the names of the persons with color.
11) there were some floating objects
12) The credits are in the trigger editor, but also mention them ingame. Like a small credit scene, like in a film.
13) You should look around in the tutorial section, how you can improve your cinematic
1) normal warcraft 3 music isn't that good for an cinematic. Try to find a fitting music for your cinematic
2) there were no sounds. Use sounds, to create a nice atmosphere.
3) camera was poorly done. Also were the camera angles. Try to find good angles, and don't apply every 20 seconds a new camera, which moves for 5 seconds.
4) terrain was lacking-average. The use of cliffs wasn't very good, especially for the lake.
5) It was quite boring, and there wasn't much suspense.
6) Why did the orc raider said that he will kill them, but then, he teleports away?
7) Reset the animation of the units after you used an animation.
8) and improve the description at hive. Tell more about the orcs, humans, main characters, etc.
9) also camera went through trees, which doesn't look good.
10) If you want to use another transmission kind, then write the names of the persons with color.
11) there were some floating objects
12) The credits are in the trigger editor, but also mention them ingame. Like a small credit scene, like in a film.
13) You should look around in the tutorial section, how you can improve your cinematic
No rating at the moment
- Joined
- Jun 13, 2009
- Messages
- 450
Thanks alot for the tips +Rep. This is my 1st cinematic so ill be working on it to make it better. Thanks again!
- Joined
- May 3, 2008
- Messages
- 3,155
The credit are suppose to be shown in the cinematic and not at trigger editor. Not everybody are into map making.
- Joined
- Jun 13, 2009
- Messages
- 450
Will take care of that in next update.
- Joined
- Jan 6, 2008
- Messages
- 2,627
im sorry, im not in the mood for working on cinematics rite now D:
- Joined
- Jul 6, 2008
- Messages
- 105
My Review
Your cinematic needs a lot of improvement. It has a long way to go before it gets approved. However, it's good for your first cinematic because mine was atrocious when I first started.
Improvements needed in this:
-Never use floating text when a character is speaking.
-Terrain is really lacking. It does not look like a real farm. Why is there Japanese Cherry Trees and African sculpture in a farm? Make the farm more realistic.
-Never use Warcraft Music
-Use Sound/Special Effects
-Camera was not well developed in this cinematic
- Credits are suppose to be in the game
- The two brothers should change into footman with armor. Not just have a weapon in their hand.
- Storyline- I didn't really understand it at all.
- A few grammar/spelling mistakes
Your cinematic needs a lot of improvement. It has a long way to go before it gets approved. However, it's good for your first cinematic because mine was atrocious when I first started.
Improvements needed in this:
-Never use floating text when a character is speaking.
-Terrain is really lacking. It does not look like a real farm. Why is there Japanese Cherry Trees and African sculpture in a farm? Make the farm more realistic.
-Never use Warcraft Music
-Use Sound/Special Effects
-Camera was not well developed in this cinematic
- Credits are suppose to be in the game
- The two brothers should change into footman with armor. Not just have a weapon in their hand.
- Storyline- I didn't really understand it at all.
- A few grammar/spelling mistakes
- Joined
- Jun 16, 2008
- Messages
- 80
created by Dmazzz....
Slaydon(Ideas + Triggering) <---- Triggers are the core of a map, he should be the creator^^
no joke, ok triggers are the core, thats ture, but maybe dmazzz did very much other things....
REVIEW: now let me make pro - review xD
-very nice imported models + 7/10
-good terrain + 8/10
-not too short + 7/10
-no action (but its just the first part) -2/30
22/30 Points
Rating: 4/5
I'm waiting for part 2
Slaydon(Ideas + Triggering) <---- Triggers are the core of a map, he should be the creator^^
no joke, ok triggers are the core, thats ture, but maybe dmazzz did very much other things....
REVIEW: now let me make pro - review xD
-very nice imported models + 7/10
-good terrain + 8/10
-not too short + 7/10
-no action (but its just the first part) -2/30
22/30 Points
Rating: 4/5
I'm waiting for part 2
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- Joined
- Jan 6, 2008
- Messages
- 2,627
well, i didnt help on this movie xP
- Joined
- Jun 16, 2008
- Messages
- 80
Oh ok... ^^
but its a nice cinematic... dmazzz... make second part!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
pls
- Joined
- Jun 13, 2009
- Messages
- 450
okay im reworking it, i will launch a second part^^
- Joined
- Aug 11, 2009
- Messages
- 6,528
As a member of the Group Map Reviewers, I will be reviewing campaigns/cinematics :
Camera : The camera work is not good at all, it should constantly move around and the cameras always had a bad view. Terrain : The terrain needs a lot of improvements, it doesn't look like a farm at all, you've used blizzard cliffs, there are doodads that do not even fit the environment. Story : The story is also not so interesting, you've used floating texts for the dialogues instead of Cinematic Transmissions, which looks bad and is hard to read. Then the dialogues, they're just terrible, you've also made a lot of typos etc. and it's confusing if those 2 men are brothers or one of them is a father. The story itself is boring, because a kid just asks his dad about his mother etc. Then comes a knight and tells them to go save the castle. It's also too short. Animations : You've used animations but they do not fit at all. I suggest you remove them. Other : There are several typos in the cinematic. Hiveworkshop : You have broken a few rules : The description is too short. You need to post the credits in the description. Overall : I would say this is far from complete and needs a lot of improvements. Work on it a lot more. Final Rating : 1/5 |
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