21:45, 24th Sep 2009
ap0calypse: Approved

Good enough for approval
Update: Re-moderating with reviews and rating!

Do not read this if you havent seen the cinematic yet!
Well i checked it:
The cinematic is fine,but you need to fix your grammar and change the text.The beginning music isnt good,cuz 3 people are talking to each other and theres a very loud music.When the deathbringer blinked behind haldung,then his teamcolor became red!

Interesting cinematic is interesting, i shall take a look.
Terrain was fine. Some minor typos, but doesn't matter much...
The fight vs the Deathbringer was fine.
Maybe a bit too much talking, but the whole cinematic was...fine
I'll rate it 3/5.

Thanks for the reviews, I gived +REP.

I'll decrease the talking, and reduce the volume for the first music.
Any more tips?

The fight could be a bit faster, i think.

Pretty nice.
BTW, where did you get the Deathbringer model?I have been searching for something like that forever.

model

Thanks.
I got that model from XGM.

I thought the fight scene was pretty sweet, how did you have them move and duck like that?

With the "Animation - Lock Body-Part Facing" trigger.

There could be some improvements to grammar needed...but the fight scenes were very well made...I'll have to give this a 4/5 because of that.

I like the battle scenes, but they were a little bit slow..

This cinematic by dubbed is about 2 person trying to collect a bounty by killing a necromancer.

The description of this cinematic at hiveworkshop was very well organize. It contain screenshot, cinematic duration, proper crediting and synopsis which is a main element in giving a appropriate detail to everybody to encourage them to download it and to show the author does show a dedication in making this map quality a decent one. This is a fine example of a appropriate description where a newbie in hiveworkshop should follow.

The forest terrain was well develop; my only complain about the terrain is the lack of wild life.

Next is the camera, the camera movement was smooth until the battle scene where the camera have a sudden rapid move (The battle scene where it overview the deathbringer and the human warrior by turning 180 degree). The camera speed movement was too fast at the part and there is a part where it's position was way off to the left that I almost cannot view the deathbringer.

As for the battle scene, it certainly was much better than the other as it does not use the concept of hack and slash only. The animation and sfx usage was fine, but the battle scene would surely leave a heavily critism from those with experience in making a battle cinematic as it contain 1 serious flaw where it can be view at most of the battle cinematic we ever seen.

The flaw I refer to is waiting syndrome. I watch the battle scene twice and I notice there is several times it happen. This is probably because you are using wait action instead of precise timing.

Overall, the quality of this cinematic was decent for average viewer. However, it would not be the same for those map maker with experience in making battle cinematic or hardcore fans of battle cinematic.

It would be 3/5 rating (Useful) based on the condition, but 2/5 rating (Lacking) if was rated on a much higher standard requirement.

As for me being acknowledge by infrane about the wait syndrome and being a battle cinematic maker, I would vote this a 2/5 (Lacking).

Of course, a vote of approval as well.

What need to be fix?

1) Camera movement & position
2) Trigger
3) Remove Wait syndrome

Oh, I just now noticed that some camera objects screwed up, it must be because the terrain editing. I did the terrain last, and didn't know it will mess up the cameras .

Thanks for the advices Septimus. Unfortunately I cannot fix anything because I lost the uncompressed map, but for the next chapter I'll use precise timing.
And the battle scene won't be slow motioned.

Review coming soon.
Editone

Awesome music and very good story! Cant wait for part 2

i just can't wait for the part 2 !!!

Is this a future campaign?

I liked it, but the grammar and story line was .... mehh :/ and also refrain from using swear words in the dialogue, like "Fuuuuuu*k", rather make the dialogue more... tense e.g. "Can it be?!" or "How could you even consider that?" ... just saiyen good fight scene though, i liked it waiting for part 2

Too short for what it's supposed to be. However, there are some nice slow motion shots.
2.5/5.

good fightings in there but its better to make them faster