Fight of Mages

Moderator · Nov 4, 2013

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Fight of Mages (Tested Last Updated Nov 5, 2013)

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	5/5	91-100	A

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	4/5	81-90%	B

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	3/5	75-80%	C

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	2/5	70-74%	D

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	1/5	50-69%	F

Overview:

Gameplay

"The fight scenes and whole commotions were great, although the dialogues and story board seems out of place I mean there should be a strong or main goal of why the mages were fighting and why kolin'jin had to have a specific reason which he doesn't have at all."

Terrain

"The main island and some others have cool terrain look, not the look that gives the cinematic a huge atmospheric view."

Management

"Overall the cinematic is good and as well as how everything went in place, still the story and terrain needs more time budget."

Total Score: (Gameplay[x/5] + Terrain[x/5] + Management[x/5] / Total Score[15] * 50 + 50)

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	8/15	77%	C

Legal_Ease · Nov 4, 2013

Please see...

Shadow Fury · Nov 5, 2013

Well, I told you it is my first upload. Well' I'll try to make the description nicer. At least, what do you think of the film?

Daffa · Nov 5, 2013

Well, I told you it is my first upload.

Rules are rules, no exception.

Well' I'll try to make the description nicer.

Good then.

At least, what do you think of the film?

I'll review it later.

Shadow Fury · Nov 5, 2013

Now I gave credits and made the description nicer. Now I am only waiting that the map gets rated and approved. :wink:

Abodaa · Nov 5, 2013

Wow!!

It is AMAZING!!! :goblin_good_job:

But because of the new cinematic map u made (Searing Conflict) I will give you 4/5

The_New_Divide · Nov 5, 2013

I had download and see it now and I think its awesome.

Firstly, you must know, i dont like the style of the cinematics. Also normally i dont review cinematics, becouz its content so much english.

The cinematic remember me at Dragonball Z so much. Really nerdy.

The effects are ok and look amazing. But sometimes you used the wrong cameraperspectives and some projectiles and waves go to confusing directions.

Some suggestions for the Downloadsite of this map:

-Add a video for a alternative using as for download and open map.
-Add some informations like length and genre of video.

My final judgement:

4/5, + Rep and this map should be approved

Shadow Fury · Nov 5, 2013

Not bad for the first map I uploaded. :grin:

I'll try to improve my map and use more effectively the cameras! About the waves, I'll try to make them go in right directions and not in confusing ones. I hope I might resolve all this issues in the second part of Fight of Mages. :ogre_hurrhurr:

However, by watching more carefully my film, I didn't find bad camera uses or waves going in confusing directions!

And for the video, I cannot make one!

Abodaa · Nov 5, 2013

LOL

Yes it is not bad for the first time,but the people want it to be much better :thumbs_up:

Orcnet · Nov 11, 2013

Map approved, see moderator comment on top.

Veritas 117 · Nov 11, 2013

I must say, I'm pretty impressed. The use of the special effects was pretty well done. The timing was good as well. Even the story, though simple, was interesting. Nice job!

The_New_Divide · Nov 11, 2013

Tabs are crazy...

I wondered, where orcnet´s review is. Then i switch from features and story to credits and voilà, here it is... what the fuck? Also under the reviewtab are superflous bb-codes at the end.

Shadow Fury · Nov 11, 2013

It's not bad at all as a first map uploaded! I am trying to improve my terrain with forests though my strong points are deserts, creepy woods, ruined villages and icy places but I'll do my best to improve.

knight820 · Nov 11, 2013

Shadow Fury said:
It's not bad at all as a first map uploaded! I am trying to improve my terrain with forests though my strong points are deserts, creepy woods, ruined villages and icy places but I'll do my best to improve.

Yeah, and also he's good at:

1. Combination spells (Attacking and Defending Spells)
2. Colored dialogue words.
3. Cinematic camera arrangement.
4. And, the Earthquakes.

I noticed that the dreadlord was floating in the air when he appears in a fight.
And, 1 dialogue correction: Lets>Let's

Anyway, nice first-try cinematic. :ogre_haosis:

Shadow Fury · Nov 11, 2013

I know the dreadlord floats in the air! I tried to let him return on the ground by making "Change Tichondrius flying height to 0 at 100", it didn't work! So, I decided to let him INTENTIONALLY float in the air.

knight820 · Nov 11, 2013

Shadow Fury said:
I know the dreadlord floats in the air! I tried to let him return on the ground by making "Change Tichondrius flying height to 0 at 100", it didn't work! So, I decided to let him INTENTIONALLY float in the air.

Now I understand why.

HappyCockroach · Nov 11, 2013

the plot is kinda weird... a quite random asset of cliches which i didn't find very interesting... it lacks an actual plot and makes it hard to the spectator feel intrigued about it. but i guess it's all about having a reason to make a fight full of fancy effects.

and the effects are surely nice. you should use more that animation speed change to create moments of higher drama. that works very well.

Shadow Fury · Nov 11, 2013

I don't know where you found those cliches because I didn't repeat anything! :vw_wtf:

And about the plot, it's easy. Galzar simply wants to show Arcanus he is stronger. Kolin'jin is a peaceful troll that found those 2 mages fighting without any reason so he wants to stop that stupid fight.

I don't think this is complicated! I think it's very straightforward!

I will keep using slow-motion effects by changing animation speed because I know they r great :ogre_hurrhurr:

However, now I am planning to make a funny film completely made with Warcraft's sounds.

Orcnet · Nov 12, 2013

The_New_Divide said:
Tabs are crazy...

I wondered, where orcnet´s review is. Then i switch from features and story to credits and voilà, here it is... what the fuck? Also under the reviewtab are superflous bb-codes at the end.

We already fixed the breaking page, sorry about that. :thumbs_up:

Inhumanality · Nov 14, 2013

Screen shoots please..

knight820 · Nov 14, 2013

Inhumanality said:
Screen shoots please..

It's a cinematic man...
Well if he does that...
I think you have to download and see it cuz it's amazing. :ogre_datass:

The_New_Divide · Nov 15, 2013

However, by watching more carefully my film, I didn't find bad camera uses or waves going in confusing directions!

I think, confusing was the wrong word from me(my fault). I mean to swa, that the waves go often firtsly to a different point(not to their target) and then change their direction.

Also did you think, your cameraperspectives are perfectly? xD

Shadow Fury · Nov 15, 2013

I didn't say my cameras were "perfect", and about the waves, I couldn't let them go perfectly to the target everytime, and, by the way, the waves going in confusing directions were very few ones.

Cokemonkey11 · Dec 3, 2013

The animation of the fights is pretty decent, and you have good instincts for cinematography. I think you should have someone review your dialog for grammar/spelling next time. If you really want to engage your viewer, you could get some voice acting as well!

Malhorne · Dec 4, 2013

Okay let's go (I don't have any template sorry zzz):

I - Terrain 2/5
Looks a bit basic overall, nothing really researched but still looks goog.

II - Gameplay 3/5
Some sfx are cool but their movements can be improved (we can really see that sometimes they are just units moving with the order moving -> Maybe switch to a dash system !), collision between missiles are cool

Facing of units well done.

III - Background 3/5
The story is a bit cheap I have to say :/
Dialogs can be improved too.

Overall : 3/5 +rep

Comment : Quite nice for a first try, but you should try to improve some spells and story/dialogs to have a better overall !

Shadow Fury · Dec 4, 2013

There r no grammar and spelling mistakes by the way.
And to those who appreciated this map, I have posted another one which is certainly much better with a greater terrain. To those interested, here is the link:

http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/maps-564/searing-conflict-244634/?prev=status=p&u=Shadow%20Fury

It's a 1vs1 battle so there IS NOT a story. Just fighting.

Malhorne · Dec 4, 2013

Me said:
Dialogs can be improved too.

Didn't say there was mistakes

I just said it can be improved in term of redaction.

Anyway I'll see the other cinematic and I'll review

(I'm on a mood to review little maps/cinematics ^^)

IamFootman061 · Dec 27, 2013

I watch the Searing Conflict so I think it's better to watch this one.

This is your first cinematic but it's good

IamFootman061 · Dec 29, 2013

Another review for your cinematic

IamFootman061

Fight of Mages Review
Review by IamFootman061

Good things:

Gameplay. A great cinematic with cool battle scenes.
Scenes. The battle scenes for was good. I like the dialog because it's colored.
Effects. I like the special effects.

Fair things:

Description. Put some screenshots to make it perfect.
Terrain. The terrain for me can improve like importing custom doodads model. Also the cliffs, you can use custom cliffs like in this tutorial

Bad things:

Design. No loading screen and preview? If this have a preview and loading screen. It could attract the players to watch your cinematic.

Suggestions:

Try to put a screenshot.
Put a loading screen and preview that fits perfectly with your map.

nigromante2012 · Jan 9, 2014

Nice map

NightStalker · Jan 25, 2014

i like it. Lots of spells you have made for this i see, but the scenario could be better

taavidude · Jan 29, 2014

Review: Fight of Mages
Good points
Alot of spells
Very nice cinematic
Bad points
Terrain was just not good at all
Some spells were awkwardly too slow mostly the wave spells
Suggestions
Improve the terrain
Some wave spells were so slow the mage could just easily avoid it by just walking away instead of teleporting
3/5

Pivius · May 27, 2014

You've got some serious :fp:

talent!

Alapottra · Feb 27, 2015

Awesome Fight :thumbs_up:

... And I Think Some Dialogue's Are Quite Funny... But Why Human Mage is Soooo Weak :ogre_rage:

..

The Wolf Studios · Jul 30, 2015

good map

deepstrasz · Feb 28, 2016

A lovely light show.
Why are they saying/naming the spells they cast?

The story premise is well... horrible. Two teenagers fighting and exchanging kiddish taunts, then an old troll comes along to stop them for no reason and starts shooting towards the elf. But wait! The orc could've killed the elf so easily from the start but didn't do it to maybe, have some fun? Afterwards it all "complicates" with a sudden appearance of a demon that could teleport the troll and the elf wherever he wants but decides it's better to put them on another island instead of letting them drown or dragging them to the Twisting Nether or whatnot.
They even have time to talk while fighting. Actually it's some sort of intermission because they just face each other while doing so.
The Firelord had some problems with understanding the fact that the other spellcasters could just teleport anywhere, anytime.
Hey, but wait! The elf dude didn't die. He just went to sleep while the others were having a jam.
The orc thanks the troll for saving him while the orc can teleport by his own means...
Oh.. the Firelord has teleportation spells too... Well, no biggie cause the others can teleport out anyways.

It's a load of confusing twists.

O.Elayadi · Aug 6, 2016

Pretty cool as a first map but i think the fight with the pyro lord of fire should be longer
Rate:4/5

Epic Producer · Jun 21, 2018

COMMENT: I thought It was a great cinematic at first, but when I saw the fighting scene's. They're just saying "Ability" without saying " I call upon 2 lighting spheres!" like that. Heres my review :necry:

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Cinematic( :spell_breaker:

) (Of course, what would you think?!)

+ Custom special effects are really impressing.. :wsmile:

+ Cameras are kinda good... :wbored:

-

Shaman said:
"Lightning spheres."

, Wthe heck! It must have some some realistic speeches! :weekani:

Terrain(

)

+ Terrain is great, love the mountain hills and the fiery place :wthumbsup:

.

Viewer Mode( :ned:

)
+ From the start, excitement and laughter.
- Came more annoying and boring with the speeches. :pnewt:

.

Total:

:fp:

3.5/5

Status = Ok..

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