An Egg

Moderator · Jun 16, 2013

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Map Approved

An Egg (Version 1.1)

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	5/5	91-100	A

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	4/5	81-90%	B

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	3/5	75-80%	C

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	2/5	70-74%	D

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	1/5	50-69%	F

Overview:

Gameplay

"An Egg" is a short Cinematic based on the story Andy Weir of creepypasta.com where life is different to what we know.

"Its a short and good dramatic cinematic, I love the story and giving it a 3D view on a warcraft scale is excellent but since its cinematic maybe giving some scenes to some climatic dialogues would give more atmosphere to the story, some close ups would be great but all thanks to low graphics of warcraft 3 it may look silly, but still its a shot."

Terrain

"There's no much terrain visible right now, only just the death of the observer and the fog view of ethereal world, but I can give a fair rating for this since you look more closely in reading the dialogues than view of spheres but my idea of giving scenes to each of it may be better."

Management

"Overall, it is creepy and well explained but the start and end cinematic has those UI still shown do remove those to give impact on the cinematic setting, also void the background music it evaporates the serious story with warcraft 3's classy soundtrack, either remove it or replace it with a more ambient soundtrack/music that is fitting for this, so for now its useful."

Total Score:

Rate	Score	Percent	Letter
	9/15	80%	C

UndeadImmortal · Jun 16, 2013

~~I probably need a custom map preview.~~ Updated.

AwzomeWulfzz · Jun 16, 2013

omfg dis is stupid as siht lol fgit fite me irl nao......

Daffa · Jun 16, 2013

You sure need a custom preview, also, as long no real religious style in the map, I'm fine

So, what's in it? cinematic?

UndeadImmortal · Jun 16, 2013

Daffa the Mage said:
You sure need a custom preview, also, as long no real religious style in the map, I'm fine
So, what's in it? cinematic?

Well uhh, it's about death, and what happen after it.

Daffa · Jun 16, 2013

Good enough, consider me checking in

I love death cinematic

Will review later,

wtf, should have check the section when I was at my cousin's house so I can dl this, my net sucks that it can't even connect to Internet :/

Binsu · Jun 16, 2013

Behold! Le review of Hell_Master XD. BTW, I did understood the story in this cinematic and I must say it is quite funny at some point and in some emotional which is a nice mix. Here is my review:

An Egg Review

[+] Good Points:
-Terrain is really looking good for this cinematic and fits the situations in the game but to add a suggestions, are you into making the terrain better and HQ? If yes, you could try changing everything to HQ doodadd destructibles and such... including tiles, and all units, it will really make a realistic touch into your cinematic.
-Of course, the grammar is really good..lol :b
-Cnematic really has a deep meaning for me which is really interesting to find out.
-What interests me more is you giving a 1 minute chat after the cinematic ends. This will give the players to discuss the cinematic or random shitz. Nice job really!

[-] Bad Points:
-I can see that it is really a small map but why is the size of the map so big? The heaven part really covers much of the place to be honest. I suggest making it smaller.
-No offense but I think the Minimap Preview is not attractive enough so suggestion is add one.
-The units cannot be really seen at the White fog and together with the strong Transparency. I suggest lessen the tone of the fog or transparency.

[] Suggestions:
-Terrain is really looking good as I say but I do think, this can still be improved which we know that there is no perfect terrain. =)
-You should try lessen the Map Size. Its too big for a short cinematic that only covers two place.
-Make the game attractive and pull more audience and what I suggest is add a minimap preview image on this one.

Overall, I really did like cinematic so much. The terrain is really looking good in each scenarios and the way the story was told is great but I do think this needs more attraction and also a proper transparency for the units. Rated 3/5 and +4 REP!

Voting for Approval! Happy mapmaking and good luck!

UndeadImmortal · Jun 16, 2013

Hell_Master said:
[-] Bad Points:
-I can see that it is really a small map but why is the size of the map so big? The heaven part really covers much of the place to be honest. I suggest making it smaller.

If the map size is smaller, you can see the units and the black edge of the map, which is pretty ugly.

Hell_Master said:
-No offense but I think the Minimap Preview is not attractive enough so suggestion is add one.

On it!

Hell_Master said:
-The units cannot be really seen at the White fog and together with the strong Transparency. I suggest lessen the tone of the fog or transparency.

Well it's heaven, ya' know!

Thanks for the review btw.

Binsu · Jun 16, 2013

No problem, and yes I do agree with your first point about making the map size big so I have come to realize that covering it with Minimap Image will do the trick, good luck!

UndeadImmortal · Jun 16, 2013

Map updated with custom map preview.

Binsu · Jun 16, 2013

Great. =)

Looks more of an attention puller now so 4/5.

GreeN!X · Jun 16, 2013

Ohh.. looks cool. Trying it out right now... Will review later.

EDIT: Hmm.. Pretty cool story. There's no point in rating gameplay since it's just a cinematic and the terrain is just fine for the story. Though I was expecting a cinematic map to be longer I think this deserves a..

sonofjay · Jun 16, 2013

Creepypasta...

Oh god, the good old days.

BLazeKraze · Jun 16, 2013

The story is great...

T. D. W. · Jun 16, 2013

holy shit, that was.. ummm.... how to say
i don't know,,,intrestin/creepy/weird/ummm/oh yeah and good

/ +rep

Daffa · Jun 17, 2013

hmm..... not a bad cinematic, yet no so religious one, which is interesting ^^
well, let's just go to work on the Review shall we?
GOOD POINTS

Nice Grammar, good job
Good Visuals for the Heaven
Nice Story
Nice Terrain

BAD POINTS

NONE

for this I vote for 4/5 [since its too short] + Approval + 2 Rep

EDIT :

Well, I guess I can't give the rep, anyway, it has been sent beforehand tho, on the first post, anyway, vote for 4/5 + APPROVAL

Orcnet · Jun 18, 2013

Map Approved, see details on top

~DARK~ · Jun 18, 2013

There Is no After that Part Said Free Chat 1 Minute

FRENGERS · Jun 19, 2013

Woow Great imagination you got there @..@
That was Fenomenal!!

+ REPT

I_am_Death · Jun 19, 2013

nice film. 5/5 :3. It's quite funny at some point, like Hell Master

ryouzai · Jun 19, 2013

Hmm, is this a trolling map ?

UndeadImmortal · Jun 19, 2013

ryouzai said:
Hmm, is this a trolling map ?

What do you mean? This was based on a creepypasta i read a year ago, I just decided to convert it into wc3.

ryouzai · Jun 19, 2013

UndeadImmortal said:
What do you mean? This was based on a creepypasta i read a year ago, I just decided to convert it into wc3.

so we just like hosting a game, have everyone join in then watch your film , that's all ?

UndeadImmortal · Jun 19, 2013

ryouzai said:
so we just like hosting a game, have everyone join in then watch your film , that's all ?

This is basically a cinematic map, a map with really no gameplay at all. Is there a problem?

neven1 · Jun 19, 2013

I had the same theory as this video :grin:

..but if i was there i would kill god..atleast i would try..no reson.I still think all religions are stupid tough.. :vw_unimpressed:

Daffa · Jun 19, 2013

^no flaming or insulting please.

Shade Da Scout · Jun 19, 2013

Now I will turn you into a chinese girl peasant from 540 AD.wait what?

made me giggle.there are few grammar mistakes but what a heck

this is one hell of a mindf*ck

ryouzai · Jun 19, 2013

UndeadImmortal said:
This is basically a cinematic map, a map with really no gameplay at all. Is there a problem?

Just wanna confirm if i need to do anything before the "trailer" ends xD

Inflicted · Jun 20, 2013

Woah. Leaves a lot to think about. Very nice.

A few grammar errors, but otherwise everything else was good. Had an eye-opening and thought-causing story, and some fairly good visuals. 5/5 +rep

Mgeterno11 · Jun 29, 2013

This map is really nice, the cinematic has a great story.
The grammar is also excellent.
And this story has a lot of meanings, and made me thinking about it, too. 5/5 + rep

My suggestion is that make a hero map based on this story, after he reincarnated.

MushiKeewi · Jul 16, 2013

I like it. It's funny. So i'm a Chinese girl?

Arad MNK · May 26, 2015

Wierd cinematic. Only Speeches. No action or Backstory. Not many Camera Movements.
The Terrain... Well there was No terrain at all! But the Part Car crash had a terrain which wasn't great, not Really bad Either.

Anyway, a 3/5 would be Good.

deepstrasz · Mar 18, 2017

Although the philosophical conversation gets you thinking (well, it's kind of silly on the long run), the cinematic itself is pretty much lacking.
3/5.

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